Voice assignment 5/13

Which of the two excerpts helps you imagine the scene in the story the best by using sensory details? As a reader I found the first excerpt from Miss Nelson Is Missing, to have more sensory details that helped me imagine what was going on. It talked about what the classroom looked like and how the children were acting. The tone of the first piece is energetic. I think it is energetic because it uses lots of diction that displays actions and the fast tempo it was written. “They whispered and giggled. They squirmed and made faces. They were even rude during story hour.” I feel like this quote expresses all the actions and how they were constantly moving. The tone of the second piece is jealousy/anger. I thinks that its jealousy/anger because the main character sounds pissed and angry that her friend wont acknowledge her and she almost seems jealous of her beauty. “Me: “How’s it going.” I try to put in my contact, and poke myself in the eye. Very cool. Rachelle: “Eehn.” She gets mascara in her eye and rubs it, smearing mascara across her face. I don’t want to be cool. I want to grab her by the neck and shake her and scream at her to stop treating me like dirt. She didn’t even bother to find out the truth – what kind of friend is that? My contact folds in half under my eyelid. Tears well in my right eye.” This quotation expresses how that she feels bad that her friend wont acknowledge her.